DRAFT FEEDBACK

Here is the list of feedback that received from submitting our first draft:

- Add in another shot of the bottle falling
- Cut down the party scene so that there is less focus and pace is built
- Add in any missing shots and finish timelapse
- Show more intimacy between the boys to show how the relationship develops
- Add in music for the party scene
- Think about manipulation of colouration to see if it would have any effect
- Add in more shot variation, ( think about adding in shots of Oli on his phone)

From this feedback I arranged more shooting days so that we could gather the footage of Oli dropping the bottle and him on his phone which shows missed calls from friends. From doing this I hope that it will add more of plot line to the trailer, allowing the audience to have a clearer idea of the genre. We have now decided to create the music for the party scene ourselves as we can then modify it to how we would like it sound. In addition we are going to review the party scene and make it less of a focus in the trailer, as we have found some of the extra footage that we have of the two main characters together is more engaging.